Rusty Fischer wrote 32 days ago

This is really great; the rhythm and flow work nicely and it's great the way you start (almost) every sentence the same way: "I hate..." Maybe they should all start that way? Either way, this poem really expresses the pain after a breakup or betrayal; great job!!!!

diane_stiffler wrote 113 days ago

This is so sweet. It's easy to relate to. Good job. :)Diane

diane_stiffler wrote 113 days ago

I like this. :)Diane

diane_stiffler wrote 113 days ago

This is such a sweet poem about a first love. Good job! :)Diane

diane_stiffler wrote 113 days ago

It's cute. I like the nervous energy that I get while I read this. I got exited for her. :)Diane

emo_skittlez123 wrote 124 days ago

awlll. Thats a very good poem. You and your friend have a talent to write. I love how it hits the nail right on the spot. Love is exactly like that. You brake up with a guy and then you relize you want him back. I have been there way to many times. lol. Well keep writing!! :D
-liv. :)

gooby wrote 139 days ago

I LOVE NICARAGUA AND ALWAYS WANT TO BE THERE NO MATTER WHAT I HOPE I GO THIS SUMMER...LOVE YA I HOPE YOU LOVE IT. I LOVE NICARAGYA.. AMO NICARAGUA

KaylaKat wrote 152 days ago

It is a very nice poem, it has great flow. However, there are a couple Spelling errors.
"I hate you for beingso nice" being so. "I hate that i" Capitalize the "i". "I hate that your" you're.
Other than that, it was great.

MidnightShadow wrote 160 days ago

i can relate to this so badly its not even funny...love it :)

AceJournalist wrote 179 days ago

"through" would be threw. After reading your 'about me', i think it's better with spelling mistakes. really good poem.

quite. spazzy. wrote 186 days ago

Looooooove it! Just fix the grammatical errors and this would be even better!

dallaschick22 wrote 188 days ago

I like it,

ikuandi wrote 189 days ago

its like a blog! cool!
i like it, but i think it needs some punctuation to break it up a little and to help the reader not become too overwhelmed.
on the plus side, it really gives a true highlight of what you personally went through, which i like, and i think that you could turn what happened into a poem or a story or something... it would be awesome!

Mik96 wrote 190 days ago

LOVE it

jzz wrote 190 days ago

This is good :) You put a lot of emotion into this which readers can kind of feel, its very powerful, nice job :) and I'm sorry about the guy :(

Soundly_Awake wrote 191 days ago

i really like this and i hate this guy too! i can totally relate in so many different ways. especially the part with the smile.

diane_stiffler wrote 192 days ago

I like this. Your emotions are so out there. I can relate to this on so many levels. Great job :)Diane

Cato077 wrote 192 days ago

This seems like a very long thought, scrambled and drawn out. the intent and message is good. i think you need to set up the emotion more and draw in the audience. instaead of saying so matter-of0factly every fact and summarizing it. Describe the first encounter, the exact thought and impressions. it makes it more relatable to the reader. i do like the style and i think it is a good beginning. Good work

Ice_on_Fire wrote 192 days ago

I can really feel the emotion. :) Good work

ClumsyGurrl wrote 193 days ago

You said "I hate you for being nice" twice (just noting)
But I can say that I like this and you did a good job of writing it with a broken heart.
Great job =)
-ClumsyGurrl