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xemmawhyx wrote 13 days ago

Amazing
Update please - LOVE IT!

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Frankie Aura wrote 45 days ago

Fifth world war?

lol i like that.
I'm coming back for more.

:D

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Night of the ExorMist wrote 50 days ago

I caught a few grammar mistakes in the latest chapter, but other than that, its great so far! I can't wait for the next chapter :)

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diran823 wrote 53 days ago

are you going to be updating this soon?

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leahsayshellooo wrote 54 days ago

HAHAHAHAAHAHAHA i love the end of the forth chapter.

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bbpstudios wrote 54 days ago

Your blurb about this story reminds me of all but human. You Guys should check it out at my page.

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MissMaddyMarie wrote 60 days ago

As far as the first chapter goes, fantastic. I have no good critique, and will get to reading the rest of it eventually. Really good!

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Love.she.wrote wrote 62 days ago

looove itttt!!!!!!!!!!!!!! so amazing! i love the idea, it was so thought out!

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fiveforfighting42 wrote 67 days ago

I just finished the first chapter, and it is excellent. I like the concept so far, and you are great with dialouge. I saw a few errors, though: when the men first walk into the conference room and see the faces of the people, you should change "upmost" to "utmost". Also, when the men first get up to speak, you change tenses with the word "seek". You should change it to "seeked". Other than those, I really like it so far. Adding to my picks and reading the rest soon!

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Hopegiver wrote 68 days ago

This is truly amazing writing!! I look forward to reading more.

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Night of the ExorMist wrote 69 days ago

By god, this story was amazing! Please, keep writing! I'll be adding this to my picks as soon as I possibly can. :]

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psycho-kisses wrote 82 days ago

I love it!

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Nickle :D <3 wrote 93 days ago

Hmmm the blurb about this book seems familiar to Romeo and Juliet. Maybe I'm wrong, I'll check this out some time. =D ; )
~Nicole

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IamJenny wrote 94 days ago

hi! im hoping you can read my novel Enchanted and give constructive criticism if you got any time..thx!
God bless!
http://inkpop.com/projects/4099/enchanted/read-project/#chapter
~jen

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ArtisitFairie wrote 94 days ago

Love the story!! Well written. Please put more soon!! =)

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Silverdreamxx3 wrote 96 days ago

I added this to my picks!
The only issue is there are a couple of small tense changes from present to past, but other than that, this story is truly amazing!

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Rosebyanyothername wrote 100 days ago

why must you leave me such a cliffhanger??? UPDATE!

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Identification wrote 108 days ago

this is a great read

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cara_ruegg wrote 108 days ago

firstly i love your book cover. secondly i love your style of writing. this is amazing. your descriptions are vivid and beautiful. i love the enchanted forest and the blue silk that brushed along her fingertips. small things like this are very beautiful touches to a story. you are so talented and will get very far one day. X

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The Butterfly Effect wrote 109 days ago

P.S. Added to my picks!:)

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