SpeakYourMind wrote 32 days ago

Very good job!
Would you mind taking a look at my poetry?
thanks!

TrikkyNikitaKainda wrote 35 days ago

Very nice!

Emmanuel Jimenez wrote 52 days ago

I wonder why no one else has commented on this? This feels like it was pondered over, yet spontaneous. Like you were siezed by an emotion and you had to hurry or you would lose the moment. This isn't bad. I like it. It's mellow. And it describes what it's like to be with God.

Emmanuel Jimenez wrote 52 days ago

It's short, which is good for my attention span. It's all describing something, working torwards the climax of the end, of which is the night. No spelling errors, simplicity, and easy to get into. Good work.

bactonbaby wrote 89 days ago

its really true, i no how you felt if you rote this from your pain and bad romance and the hole will never fill up and heel i can tell you that

dotdotcurve** wrote 104 days ago

I like this :) Also, you can have your heart broken at that age.
It's happened to me!

Whoa, people haven't commented on this in a while..
Oh well, that just makes my comment more special! :p
Nice work!

-Jailla

FireDancer wrote 120 days ago

I thought the unique ending was very interesting. It was a cute poem, and it's the kind of poem a mother would read to her child as I see it.

Crazy BlueRose wrote 128 days ago

Very sweet!

Crazy BlueRose wrote 128 days ago

Cute!

lightseeker wrote 146 days ago

Oh, okay DarkAngel, this is SO sweet :) The love in this poem just floats right off of the screen! It is a very warming and beautiful poem. I like the style too. Very well written also. Woo! Another great piece

WhiteRabbit wrote 148 days ago

This is quite unique. I've only read the first chapter. Usually, I would not like the opening of a book to be once upon a time, but it was a very effective idea, as it is a fairy tale. The Prince sounds sweet, but I think he's fallen in love a bit too quickly. Maybe you need to describe more about how she's feeling when she's talking to the Prince.
Generally, this is well written so far.

Madison Winborne wrote 153 days ago

creative...Its like im there with them

Madison Winborne wrote 153 days ago

creative...Its like im there with them

MirkwoodElf wrote 154 days ago

Umm…thoughts.
Beginning is too lovey-dovey. Dameon’s royal mommy and daddy are just gonna sit back and let him fall in love with a commoner? Toss some conflict in there. It’s been going too well for too long. And why did she recognize him at once? (I hope Isabella isn’t me, ‘cause I was NEVER that nice to you about ZWP.) And. Tank tops were NOT in style in medieval times. Neither was calling you’re parents Mom and Dad. The currency is likely to be a bartering method. If coins are used at all, they wouldn’t be dollars; they’d be coins of some sort. Pretty good except for those things. Write more soon, please!

TheMightierPen wrote 154 days ago

Okay, just after reading the introduction, I can see your talent and dedication to this. The details you put in were so creative. Then, when the book starts, it sounds like it's written like a classic fairy tale. I can't wait to read more!

DD wrote 158 days ago

interesting. it is really good

i see a lot of potential. there are a few grammatical errors: run-ons, paragraph spacing and i love the information on fairies. my daughter will absolutely love this
d;

Steph Burton wrote 159 days ago

i like it, it's a nice story and really sweat. I like how you have put soo much detail and effort into this. great job!

Starlight-poet wrote 159 days ago

I think this poem has a very powerful flow to the nice description. The fonts really tells alot of it Nice work

danakay wrote 160 days ago

Aw, this is so sweet! I really like it's innocence and its honesty

lightseeker wrote 160 days ago

I like this so far. You definately have thought about this in detail. I appreciated the detail of the introduction and I love the thoroughness of your character's feelings. Great job so far!!