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Rank 9584 (-119)
Word Count
61
Date submitted
01.18.2010
Date Updated
01.21.2010
by polkadots88
Poem
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wrote 84 days ago
Is the secret that you can write!!?? This isn't half bad! I would just watch the repetition (talking about the clothes more than once). But honestly I probably couldn't write this any better :)
wrote 103 days ago
I was just browsing when I stumbled upon your poem. Ahhh...what's the secret! lol That's a cliffhanger! I don't know why you said you weren't good at writing on your profile page, because I think this is fabulous. I just want to know what the secret is! :o)Amy - Saving Elizabeth
wrote 138 days ago
THis is goodKeep at itAA
wrote 141 days ago
like everyone else, i want to know what the secret is. :)or maybe i don't? it is your poem.but it's very well-written and unique. i really liked it.deirdre
wrote 159 days ago
this is a really nice poem. though i am utterly lost with the meaning, or the secret, i really like it. well done:)
Dangit, now I want to know what the secret is. :DI like this poem. It's clever and quirky.
wrote 171 days ago
It's good.I like it!:]I like it if you would comment my poems and put one on your pick list!I'm trying to get one to the top five,Thanks:]-Cassie
wrote 174 days ago
I like it :D
wrote 175 days ago
I liked this is was very interesting it drew me in and i found myself trying to guess what was the secret on the floor...
wrote 176 days ago
very interesting... I like how you never actually said what the secret is. it gives the reader a chance to let their imaginations run with this poem. Good job:)
wrote 185 days ago
This is really very pretty while being quite sad and even slightly sinister.So what is the secret on your floor underneath all the dirty clothes and dust? Is it your carpet? hahah LOL. Only kidding, but you gotta wonder.All the best.Leigh
wrote 187 days ago
Wow, this is really msyeterious and interesting. I was really curious to see if you would actually tell what this secret was, and I found it cool that you let the mystery hang in the air and didn't reveal this secret. Your room sounds a little like my room at the moment, haha but what teenager doesn't have a messy room?Great poem.
wrote 189 days ago
ohhh mysterious! I like it :)
wrote 191 days ago
Nice, At the risk of sounding obscene, it makes me think of dirty bragas, evidence of a forbidden affair.
0_o, what's the secret??? this is soo cool! it's rockin' awesome, i think i might die of suspense, just to be dramatic. kinda sounds like my room a bit, lol
I really enjoyed this poem alot... Im dying to know what the secret is... maybe it's your younger sibling you couldn't take anymore? lmao jk but seriously you have a few grammatical errors that if taken out will make this really shine. Nice!
I like this alot Im dying to know what that secret is... maybe you're little brother? lmao just kidding but seriously aside from like 2 grammatical errors it was good
wrote 192 days ago
I'm going to be up all night trying to figure out what the secret is! o.O Really mysterious poem. I like it!
wrote 193 days ago
There are a few spelling and slight grammatical errors, but otherwise you have a cool idea here. It's really mysterious and dark. Nice job! (And by the way, thanks for your comment!)
wrote 194 days ago
Try reading your poem out loud. You will catch the mistakes that are there in your flow. Especially read your second line out loud.
:D that was intertaining and mysterious! o_o I'm intreagued as to what is hidden lol
"There's a secret on my floor, buried beneath the clothes a rubble"----I like the image you paint right from the beginning, and it is intriguing with the secret ... good opening ..."All musty a gray"---liked this"And I don't think anyone is going to find it ... well, any time soon"---hah! Loved this, So funny!!!"Buried beneath this room's gloom"---niceAnd we don't get to find out what the secret is?!?!? You're killing me!!!I liked this! I found it well done and entertaining! Good job. :) ~Morgan
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