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Rank 3186 (-43)
Word Count
109
Date submitted
01.19.2010
Date Updated
by !Mwah*
Poem
Umm, I wrote this based on personal experience.
This really did happen to me. And I wrote about it here.
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wrote 113 days ago
Oh, wow. This is so beautifully written. It's powerful and emotional and I love it I love it I love it. -nicole
wrote 138 days ago
"My wrist will fall open" Brilliant! Your poetry is amazing. So manuy people can relate to it an your words flow together beautifully. It was so dark as if the pain was flowing out of your poetry. Great job! You are an amazing poet!-Megan
wrote 143 days ago
Wow, that was amazing!It was well written and powerful. It also tells such a sad tale. Absolutely incredible.:)
wrote 148 days ago
I love it!! Easy to relate to (for me anyway... ) and i just love it. The last line is delivered with such force. It's very well written.
wrote 155 days ago
this is absolutely amazing, i love it, i love it, i love it. my favorite line of it is "i only bleed for you, i don't even bleed for myself" it was just such a strong statement, and you delivered it with force. i cant wait to read your other material.btw, did i mention i love it?
wrote 158 days ago
really really good. i love the breaks between each stanza and i love the rhyme. my favorites the third stanza. kinda stopped me for a moment, but in a good way
I really liked this. I think a lot of people can identify with it because it's so raw and real. And after reading your profile, I think you are very funny. :)
wrote 159 days ago
I think everyone can relate to this in a way. I've been, in the past... It's an interesting poem.I like the story behind it(:-Bianca
nice work! i can relate to this :)
wrote 172 days ago
i can definitely relate to this. its hard for me to cry. it takes a lot so i do that at times. please check out my work and tell me what you think.
wrote 175 days ago
Whoa. I love this, I can really relate to this. :)Keep up the good work! ^^xoxo Cassie xoxo
i like it, deep emotion. it flows like a somg.
wrote 176 days ago
Yep i agree with....uh.... the dude under me. Dark and beautiful. You know it sound like a song, i mean lyrics. It should be a song.
wrote 177 days ago
Great. I loved it. Its intense and beautiful/
depressing, but great story. Ive been broken plenty of times, and a lot of them recently, so this story is totally relatable
wrote 179 days ago
Very intense! It's like I'm seeing through the authors eyes - and I like that, even though this does bring back memories (not the good ones either) i still like it!--yours truly--> Carter Storm
wrote 180 days ago
This is really sad.It has a very good flow.I like poems with rythmI tend to tap along if i find a songy one.I think this could be turned into a song!
wrote 181 days ago
awesomeonly thing i'd change is do not to don't just to make it roll of the tongue betterd;
i've got you on my reading listd;
wrote 184 days ago
Nice..... i think you hit the mark on the expression of the intense depression that emotional struggle causes. my big words mean nothing but..... great job.
wow. i really liked this poem
This is really intense. The emotion from this was very well shown. Your imagery and rhyme scheme was great too.I like this :)
This is so powerful, so dark and upsetting. Great expression of the emotional pain felt. Well written.Nice work.Leigh
Wow! So much emotion! Great job! I think I have a friend that's like this. :/ But shes not all dark lol.~CJIZZLE
Well like Mailreaper said cutting is something many people do and I don't do it anymore. So it is better now.
This is so much deeper than it implies!I first got pulled in my the cover art. :) (I do look at that stuff, yes! If it interests me, I'm bound to go and read it). On top of that, I like sad things. I'm a sad-a-holic. Although happy things make me jump for joy, I like the deeper, darker stuff too.So how to explain this fully in my own words. Well, the same way you did with your poem!It's rich in emotion and dipped just enough into that depressing chocolate that makes this just a delicious treat of sorrow. Yes, an oxymoron for sweet and sorrowful, but hey, it works as a comparison! You've experienced this, so you have a first hand accoutn of what it's like. What I'm sorry about is that you harmed yourself. Cutting is something that many people do... it's sad. I hope it's better for you now!I liked this in the darkest of ways. Great job.
Very sad. I can feel your pain the writing.
wrote 185 days ago
Nice one!
It took me moment to let this sink in. It's much deeper than I first construed it. Very well written. Sad, but deffinitely real. This kind of thing will sober even the most excitabe person. Nicely done. I did like how this subject matter was presented. Good work.
wrote 189 days ago
Stunning writing with an excellent delivery of such a serious matter.
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