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Rank 1199 (-23)
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294
Date submitted
11.03.2009
Date Updated
by Sila
Poem
Saying goodbye is never easy.
Letting go is hard enough to do without never really knowing if in my heart it was never meant to be you.
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wrote 300 days ago
I've read a lot of break up and romantic poems on this site but this is one of the beautiful poems that I have read in a long time. Normally I'm not the romantic type and would just skim through a poem like this but I couldn't stop reading until the very end. It's really powerful and sad and so many other adjectives that I can't think of right now. Haha. Very well written. Beautiful! Keep up the great work! :)
wrote 303 days ago
This was so lovely! I adored the contrast in it, going from a positive aspect to a negative one or vice-versa in each of the separate couplets in the beginning, and then all the metaphors in the middle. I liked how the comparisons were things that everyone understands and I think feels at some point. This was my favorite: "It's like if I were a play list you'd be my number one song/just like milk and cookies, we were two pieces that could never fit wrong." So pretty! <3
wrote 45 days ago
I usually don't like romantic/breakup/ sappy poems but I loved this one! There were some spots that rhymed and many metaphors. I love the way you have a good/happy/positive thing and bad/sad/negative thing in the beginning, where you have two lines paired together. They compare and contrast, yet fit together "like milk and cookies". In all, I think all that I have to say is in the paragraph where it's talking about dreams and nightmares coming true it would sound better as "but on the pessimistic flip side nightmares do too." instead of "but on the pessimistic flip side, nightmares and come true too." Also, although I get that you formatted it the way you did because it works and sounds better that way, the fact that there are the spots with two sentences bunched together at the beginning and then the single lines afterwords is somewhat unpleasant on the eyes, and makes the poem sort of uneven. Still, all in all, I loved it! I'm even going to pick it, I think!
wrote 117 days ago
This is a great little poem. I, especially liked the first two lines and how they contradicted each other in such a lovely manner and in the seventh line I love the word choice. Callous and malice is fun to say together. And with the talk of cookies and pie, I am now hungry. Thanks. :P
wrote 150 days ago
That really hits home! It kind of made me feel guilty but it was really emotional! I have a series of poems that starts at the beginining of a relationship and how it progresses. If you like reading the kind of poems you write then please read one of mine because I think you'll like it ;)
wrote 161 days ago
So sad but I love it! This shows true emotion that is just dripping from your words. Your a fantastic writer, keep it up!
wrote 163 days ago
You’ve done a great job in showing this narrator’s heartbreak and sadness. I like how you have used various objects to make comparisons such as a slice of apple pie, milk and cookies.I really like your two lines about dreams coming true and that nightmares can come true too. That’s very daunting in a way…Another awesome job :)
wrote 164 days ago
This is utterly amazing. The narrator is so honest with their feelings taking us through the ending of a relationship that could have been... Fantastic writing! ~Diane
wrote 166 days ago
You've got some really cool imagery in here. I also love that you use some words that are different. I really like the way you used the word "forte". Really great style!I would also like it if you could read my poem "Spoken With Love", if not I understand.
wrote 167 days ago
I really like this poem, you've used interesting words and phrases :) Please can you read my poem 'The internal hurt'. Thanks.
wrote 170 days ago
"And things could have been different because dreams really do come true,but on the pessimistic flip side nightmares can come true too." -- That line was absolutely bloody brilliant. Whoa.This is such a heart-tugging poem. Like, gah. I just flashbacked to a bunch of past breakups I've had, and just... waah. D; Lovely job~
wrote 171 days ago
Good-Bye. I Like The FeelingWell Done.
wrote 173 days ago
nice! i love how you portray the heart break felt when saying goodbye. A lot of my poems follow on this topic. Well written!
Wow! I love this! It has great contrast and the emotions are strong. It is without a doubt, beautifully written and one of the best so far.
wrote 181 days ago
....this poem is amazing :) I really loved it...and it reminds me of what i went through a while back :)
wrote 187 days ago
This has fabulous contrast, and even though I haven't gone through a romantic break-up, it really strikes me as holding a lot of truth. Great emotion. Fantastic job.
wrote 194 days ago
This poem was so familiar to my internal feelings. KEEP WRITING!
wrote 211 days ago
"Nightmares can come true to" I liked this partThis was really powerful and good, I really liked it.I loved everything about this,from the imagery to the rhyming, the concept to the descriptiveness. I can find no flaw with this writing, it is genuine and good.Added to Picks^^Excellent job
wrote 223 days ago
I like how you tell your story allowing the reader to feel what you are. Personally i went through the same thing recently where I just refuse to call back. Lol So I definitely can relate to what you are saying here. Good I def like the pattern and the flow too
wrote 224 days ago
“I’ll just think of you everyday”---so funny from the lines prior …“That I won’t want to see your face”----oh, this is so clever …. Love this pattern …“Being afraid of emotions seem to be my brand new forte”---like this“Because in my own twisted way”---nice“I was a pursuit, and you were a chase”----good“But on the pessimistic flip side, nightmares can come true”---this was great“Images, sounds, and scents tainted with your touch”---love this“There was a piece that knew it was never you”----oh, I like this thought!Extremely clever ... too many good moments to count. You are fabulous, well done! ~Morgan;)
wrote 231 days ago
This is amazing, I really love the ryming you used in pleaces. the First two stanzas are my favorite. this is beautufully writin, Congradulations.
wrote 234 days ago
The font was so small I got a headache trying to read it. Any chance you can make it bigger for us old fogies? Thanks.
wrote 253 days ago
I enjoyed this, my only crit is "like a slice of apple pie." It seems like it just doesn't fit. This poetry type of poetry isn't exactly what I know best so idk. I tried thinking of something else to put there but I am stumped. Maybe: "I would never lie" ?great job with this one :]
wrote 256 days ago
I really like this oneThe couplets add a nice touch to it with contradictory phrases and when you switch to single lines it is like you are finally breaking up and moving on
wrote 258 days ago
this is charged with emotion, and you can really sense the loss the poetic voice is feeling! a great piece of writing - well done! :)
wrote 272 days ago
Another splendid poem. Very emotional. Very, well, sad. My only recommendation is maybe try some poetry that doesn't rhyme. Play more with the choices of words, the structure. It's not that I dislike your poems, it's just that I see such great imagery in them, I think you could try and be successful at some really cool things! :) Maybe you have, and just haven't posted.Anyway, great writing!
wrote 273 days ago
Really stunning. Almost childlike in a totally unbelievably good way. Great work and don't loose that whimsical nature that gives your writing such character. Wonderful job. God bless,...,
That was amazing. It hurts when that stuff happens it is deep but true I LOVED it keep up the amazing poems.
wrote 274 days ago
This sounds so much like my life. You have like no idea. Going to add to picks when I get on the computer:)
Since joining Inkpop about a month ago I have grown from HATEING poems to lovoing them - and it is all because of peoms like this one :)I have read alot of good poems on this sight but a certain truth rings out through it (and it defiantly connected with me in a way, perhaps making it even MORE powerful :D) Really good poem Sila, very will written and it reads out beautifully :)Vicky x
wrote 275 days ago
A very emmotive piece of writing. The sentences flow well together; this is great poetry. Well done.
wrote 277 days ago
This was very stunning. I enjoyed the contrasts and couldn't stop reading.
So beautiful. I loved the line "I was a pursuit and you were a chase" -- SO good. The development of the story in the poem was gorgeous and the simplicity of this added an intricate, fragile feel to it. Amazing.
wrote 278 days ago
I agree with LenaLovely - I love how lines were paired. It worked well and helped get the message across. The wording was beautiful, the idea was raw and true. I enjoyed reading it =)
wrote 281 days ago
I like the comparisons, it helps me to understand where your getting at. =) Very nice.
I'm not much for poetry but this had some wonderful vocabulary and great painful imagery in it.
wrote 290 days ago
IT'S BEAUTIFUL. Great work!
wrote 291 days ago
Aww, i luv this, its so touching..."at the core of my heart there was a piece that knew it was never you," is such a sad but nice line
wrote 292 days ago
This is a beautiful poem. I'm sad for her. I liked the happy we-fit-together perfectly versus the brokenness of it. I like the use of cuplets that stop as the poem ends. It helped pace the poem to its best perfection. In the third cuplet though the phrase "my brand new forte" kind of made me stumble a bit but it could just be me. Otherwise it was very well written and protrayed strong emotions that leapt off the page. Keep up the wonderful work. Best, Gracie.
wrote 294 days ago
So amazing, I love the milk and cookies - simplicity at it's best! Amazing writing (as usual with you). Keep writing and well done!!!!
Very sweet and sad at the same time. You did a great job at making me feel the depth of emotion.
wrote 295 days ago
really lovely
i really really love this poem - you are very very talented!
AWSUM
Amazing.
wrote 299 days ago
aww, very sweet and easy to relate to. although i'm not one who likes rhyming poems much (weird inclination towards non-rhyming) and i don't really buy into cliche similes about love and heartbreak, i rather enjoyed your work! keep up the great work (:
...that was epic. I might be prejudiced because it applied perfectly to someone in my own past, but I've never been able to put it down the way you did. Kudos to you. I'm going to have to unpick Forsaken now so that this can go on my pick list.
wrote 302 days ago
I loved this poem. You did a really good job illustrating what you felt. And I thought this was very well written. Keep up the good work.
I could totally relate to this. **added to my picks =)-Resah
wow! This is *awesome*!
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