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Rank 2423 (-37)
Word Count
125
Date submitted
02.02.2010
Date Updated
02.08.2010
by Katrina Santillan
Poem
It's not that I wanna have it, it's just that I wanna deserve it.
I guess to some extent you get used to being alone. You get used to not expecting phone calls and having nothing to do at night. You don't expect to turn around to open arms any longer. Your thoughts echo through your head, with no one to share them with. All in all, being alone isn't terrible, it just hurts like hell.
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wrote 74 days ago
I really like this. It encapsulates every 14 -16 year old girls emotions (at least mine and the ninety percent who aren't models)! You have an honesty and vulnerability that shows so beautifully. I'm adding it to my pick list.
wrote 112 days ago
Wow. These are feelings so many people have felt, but you have chosen to voice, and voice well. Well done!
wrote 120 days ago
I like the last line. It has got a very deep meaning and a good imagery. Keep writing!
wrote 139 days ago
I love your very last line, "And Light up, not blend in". A lot of emotion in this, and it's great to read to poem that doesn't focus on love or break ups or something, you know? Wonderful work! I also love the "I'm always going to be somebody's friend"; it actually reminds me a lot of Ron Weasley from Harry Potter :D
wrote 143 days ago
Goes to my watch list
This is amazing, yet poignant. I love the intensity of the flow. Keep writting dear
wrote 144 days ago
Very intense poem. I can relate to this poem. I like it a lot---the easy flow, the honesty, the way you've portrayed how many people feel or have felt. Good job! ;)
wow...deep and intense! i simply adore the fears u've portrayed here!good job! :)
wrote 145 days ago
I think that you have some true talent in this department. It's very deep, and very short, which makes a cool combination. I love this, and not only do the words have meaning, but they also flow together. I haven't seen much of that on here.I can really see where you're coming from here. To stand out, instead of staying with the background, is just something even the really nonsocial girls and women want. I can say that from a really nonsocial girl point of view. I hope you keep writing!
I think you beautifully depicted every woman's dark inner fears. It is especially hard to conquer those fears without self confidence. Because confidence IS the light, the glow, when you walk into a room :) You have a great use of imagery and a very nice way with choosing your words that really speak to the reader emotionally :) Great job
wrote 155 days ago
i really like this nicely done
wrote 157 days ago
Very relatable. I feel the same as this narrator in the poem. I really that line about wanting to be somebody's everything is really nice.Nice work :)
wrote 165 days ago
I agree with Charles! Everyone will have their time when someone's eyes meet them... And when your eyes meet someone else. Anyways, great job on this! I like the emotion you sent to us right away! X-D~CJIZZLE
Question: Is the L in Light up intentional? Just something that was distracting me >>This accurately portrays the emotions of those that feel unwanted in a nice condensed form. Nicely done ^^(But those that feel unwanted should perk up! There is always someone that cares. And will want to know you).
This is amazing. I can totally relate to ya cuz i'm currently feeling like that too but don't worry but be optomistic
wrote 166 days ago
I think everyone can relate to this poem. and don't worry you'll have yours :)
wow, this is amazing. It's short, but powerful. Great job :)
wow i love this! its very powerful in such few words
wrote 169 days ago
I love this poem! I really relate to it. I can't promise you that you'll stay there for very long, but for now you are defiantly on my picks list.
wrote 171 days ago
OMG! i love this poem. I can totally and utterly relate to it! ur very good!!!
wrote 172 days ago
I can completely, COMPLETELY relate to this. This is how I always feel, and I know how terrible it is. The words are really jarring here, and really get across the message. Beautiful, and very touching.
You Will... Every one is someones everything... and eventually someone will notice you like they have never noticed any one else. You are beautiful.... we all are..
Nice Poem I like it It has passion
wrote 173 days ago
This was so great. Short, but simple, and heartbreaking at the same time it made the reader smile. Everyone is insecure sometimes, and this portrayed realistic emotions really really well. Great job! :)
well versed Katrina, plus i can relate...my thoughts are the same as yours..am i going to end up alone?..i wrote a piece called "gone" in reference to someone i had feelings for and since that relationship has ended, i haven't meet anyone since and i dont i think i ever will.......anyways, good job Katrina and keep writing from the heart.....Kurt
Trust me, you will never end up alone. I can tell you from a man's point of view that if that is really your picture up there, you have absolutely nothing to worry about. I am surprised that when you walk around your school, you do not sense or feel people 'checking you out.' Dispel those thoughts immediately because they are foolish thoughts.Your emotions are lying to you because of your own insecurities! Tear them from you and cast them to the dogs!*If I was young again and saw you, I wouldn't think twice about telling you how lovely you look. . . Honestly!*
wrote 174 days ago
Well, that made me very sad. It's quite good; it just hits a certain chord with me that's very sad. It's beautiful, though. The lines 'Think I was beautiful. Not after they get to know me, or after they see inside my soul' are strong and good and sad. Very good job.
Awww. Very well done. =D
wrote 178 days ago
I really like this and i can relate 2 itGreat job!!! =)
The reader can feel the pain of the girl who just wants to be noticed. Nice use of language to get that across.
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